…is available for reading here.
One completely minor and irrelevant bonus of the rewrite – the Goblin prisoner thing takes up exactly one chapter. It is now latish, and I think chapter eleven will happen tomorrow.
Okay, here’s the first of today’s reposts. I have wrestled with the suck, and I think I’m getting the upper hand. This is still raw in places, but nevertheless is going in the direction I want.
You can read the new version here. If you look at the “start reading” page you will see that I’ve moved the original versions of chapters nine, ten and eleven over to the right to make room for the new ones. Chapter ten should be up shortly, and eleven hopefully before I go to bed.
The new versions are, I think, better paced and more to the point. I hope you agree.