It’s a kind of magic
It’s Veil War Thursday, and that means Chapter 25 is here. Your teaser:
The black cloud sent tendrils of smoke like questing fingers toward the shimmering dome that Jerome had manifested. They touched and Jerome cried out in pain, bent over like he’d been gut shot. The apprentice slowly straightened. His dome stretched inwards, compressed not by force but by pure ill intent. There was a buzzing in the air, almost inaudible but unnerving.
Van Buskirk’s men were looking around for the source of the sound. Seeing nothing, they ducked their heads like they were expecting incoming fire. The malevolence in the air raked Lewis’ nerves. This was no magical version of artillery, lethal but senseless. He could feel, though he had no idea how, that something conscious and evil was outside that fragile shield. It was hungry and it wanted in.
Things are starting to heat up. As always, use the comments to point out errors, make critiques or just say random things to annoy people.
One other request: if the spirit moves you post links on your blogs and facebook wall. Pitch the story on your tv show. Incorporate it into your next movie. Ask your local representative to mention it on the floor of the House of Representatives. The audience for the Veil War has already grown far beyond what I expected. A huge part of that has been word of mouth (thank you all) and I’d like that to not only continue, but expand. Look at this way: the bigger my audience is, the easier it will be to sell this book. And the quicker I can become a full time writer and kick this stuff out even faster. So really, it’s in your best interest. 🙂
I’ve started to proofread/edit the story, got a question: Is there a particular way you want to see the corrections? I have the story so far in Word 2002 SP3, a fairly non-sucky version of Microsoft’s dreadful abortion of a word processor.
I’ve put double-strikeout through the words and phrases I want to see changed, and have the corrections inserted immediately after. Anything I want added, such as commas, is in [square brackets].
Alternatives: I could just make the corrections and hand them over to you as a finished work. Or, I could print it out and go over it with an editing pencil (blue or red, your choice), and mail it to you.
Like to know your thoughts. Great stuff, by the way. I love stories that inspire my own desire to write.
Bill, I’m speechless.
Send me an email and we can discuss details.